Feedback on profile texts

[Xute]

I believe there is a quite active one for received postcards:

Need help translating a postcard you've received?

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Probably it can be done there too

[MariceNZ]

@Xute I don’t think it’s confusing, I have something similar on my own profile but hardly ever get cards that are like that. I’ve now joined a couple of tags to get rid of some of my own postcards that fit that description. I have received a couple of cards people didn’t like and I love it when they tell me what they don’t like about it.

[Jarana]

@jewelldelis

update this post to create sort of a Wiki to link to member’s poll comments in like the 1st or 2nd post

Done If you had other ideas to improve it, please feel free to do so!

[jlk254]

I’d appreciate feedback on my profile: https://www.postcrossing.com/user/jlk254

[Jarana]

Your profile is very friendly and well written. I’m not a big soccer/football fan myself, but you write very passionate about this topic. I surely would find an interesting card for you

[industria]

Dear @jlk254,
I enjoyed reading your profile and would have fun both selecting a card and writing it.

Edit: As you read my feedback on “grammar”, I deleted it. I’m glad I could help!

[industria]

Hey everyone,
it would be lovely if some of you kind people could give feedback on my profile?
I’m rather new to postcrossing and the forum and would appreciate your input!
@jewelldelis, I loved all the in depth feedback you gave! Would you mind sharing your thoughts on my profile as well?
Thanks so much in advance!

[jlk254]

Thank you very much! And good spot, I didn’t notice. Appreciate it

[Loveanna]

Hi
I’m new to postcrossing and would love to get feedback on my profile. My aim is to give enough information without being overbearing. Giving hints about what I like to make it easier for a person to pick me a postcard, yet also leaving the choice entirely up to them. If I could make that come through better, I’d appreciate all the help

[Jarana]

Hello Anna! Wellcome to Postcrossing

You shared a good amount about your hobbies and interests. I would send a postcard, that matches the things you enjoy - maybe a handmade-card.
I like the open for everything style in your profile, but some people like lists more. Maybe you could add something like “send me any card/ your favourite card” if you want to write a suggestive sentence about the cards for you, but in my opinion it’s not necessary.

[Xute]

@jlk254 I saw the women’s football and immediately related to it (my best friend was playing women rugby-7 professionally, it might be apple and oranges, but I would know what to write about). Overall profile is nice, plenty to read but not overloaded.

@industria I like the profile, it’s friendly and has all the essential parts - to relate to you and get ideas what to send, if I’d provide some critic - the structure of presentation feels a bit chaotic to me in the beginning (like two separate paragraphs on what you feel about postcrossing and there is a bit of repetition on what you like in cards). Imagining myself as person with poor English, even though you say what you want to receive, I’d be confused.

@Loveanna Friendly and nice! I’m a bit confused about ‘inner lives’ - would I write about my inner thoughts and feelings or tell you little things about my everyday life? (if I were pregnant, I’d write about “inner life” so much ) Maybe better wording needed to be advised by native English speaker. Essay writer in me disagrees on using ‘much more’, ‘and so on’ phrases more than once. But then seeing “hygge” in profile is for me now I would write about what makes me happy on the card

Oh my, I hope I’m not too harsh! Just saying where confusion for me occurs, all three profiles seem like ones I like to get, picking a card to send would be plenty nice ^^

[industria]

Thank you so much for the feedback! It didn’t feel harsh to me at all. I’ll look over my profile again and see what I want to incorporate. Just not now, I feel too tired for that. Thanks again!

[WMiddel]

I’m very curious what you all think of the text on my profile. Especialy whether it is demanding for anything or not. Because I don’t want readers to get the feeling they háve to pick one of my suggestions or they háve to add a souvenir.
Thanks in advance for taking the time to read my profile!

[Jarana]

Hello @WMiddel, your profile is very friendly and in my opinion not demanding.

I only found a minor grammtical mistake in your german sentence. It’s better to put the verb to the end of the sentence, so it would be “Du kannst mir auf Deutsch, Englisch, Niederländisch oder Spanisch schreiben”

[nnniiina]

I also think your profile is very friendly and not demanding at all. I could easily find a card for you from my stash and would be happy if I happened to draw your address in the future.

[_Hawkwind_]

Your profile is nice, friendly and not demanding at all. I also wouldn’t have any problems finding a matching card for you.

There is another grammatical mistake though:

Instead of “Since 2,5 years, I am studying to become an elementary school teacher.” I would write “I have been studying to become a primary school teacher for 2.5 years.”

[WMiddel]

@Jarana Danke schön! I’ll change that.
@nnniiina Thank you for your kind words!
@_Hawkwind_ Thank you for the grammar check, I’ll change it.

And to all three of you: thanks for taking the time to read my profile and giving me such kind feedback. I’m glad to hear you don’t think it’s demanding.

[Rosarioo]

Hello. I don’t know how this works but I would love some feedback. Thank you

[industria]

Hi @Xute,
I went and changed my profile quite a bit. Do you think you could check it again to see if it is easier to understand now? Is the organization less chaotic?
Thanks again for your feedback!

[industria]

Hi!
You just do what you did and we’ll give you feedback.

I find your profile short but easy going. You give ideas in case someone is looking for those, but also make clear that you’ll appreciate any card. This way it is not demanding.
I noticed some minor mistakes:

click here

And I’m a Snoopy absolutely fan.

Shouldn’t it be: "And I’m an absolute Snoopy fan. ?

But most of all I`ll happy to get

I’ll be happy

And last but not least: How did you get emojis into your profile? I would love to do that in mine, too, but I haven’t figured out how yet!